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Digital Communication Technology, such as emails, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for you answer and include examples.

It is a common belief that Digital
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Communication
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 the
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 and connection between individuals.
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, I firmly
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believe
 that it has no
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, even improved
communication
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 and connection between
people
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.
To begin
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 with, Digital
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such
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 as emails, instant messaging and social media, is more convenient than the previous method
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letters
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, or
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newspapers
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.
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the internet is faster than almost
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 method, and it
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 can express a lot of data. A normal message on
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 nowadays can
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 in a mass of information that in the past we can not express
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 one time. According to a
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recent
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people
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are feel
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 more convenient when they communicate with their
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related
 by instant message than sending a writing-letter, which is
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time-consume progress. And they
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 like the new one
than
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 the old
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one because
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 it has more
form
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forms
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 of
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 like
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the direct
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 message or video call. On top of that, through Digital
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people
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interacting
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 with more
people
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 than the old procedure.
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 devices, users tend to meet and have
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a conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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 online with new
friends
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, which is very interesting for many individuals.
People
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 keep surfing the internet more, more
friends
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 that they will receive. But more
people
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not
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means
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 the quality of the relations decline, user knows how to filter their
friends
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 to match them best.
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, a
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recent
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people
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 more relationship when they
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internet
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the internet
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 to communicate than using the old one. And the quality of friendship
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extend
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 due to the knowledge they earn in the process of
communication
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 online. To sum up, Digital
Communication
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Technology
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 is more convenient than other types of
interacting
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interaction
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 and
people
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also
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 has more choice to make
friends
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. For these reasons, it is clear that Digital
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Communication
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Technology
 really improved
communication
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 and connections between individuals.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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