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In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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City
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 planners are willing to allocate separate parts to each facility,
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 as shops, schools, offices and homes. I personally believe that zoning has both positive and negative points but, the benefits outweigh the downsides. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks in separating different areas that are by no means negligible.
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zones that are located in schools and offices might be overcrowded during rush hours in the morning and in the afternoon. To put it differently,
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 would lead to increased traffic congestion in those areas.
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, during nights and holidays, these places would be empty.
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 emptiness might be a suitable place for potential offenders and drug dealers to commit crimes.
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, there are several benefits to zoning separately.
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 with, when the same activities are being built together, it would be an efficient land use in that area.
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,
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 land use assures planners that each area has a special purpose.
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, homes are built in residential zones, which are near commercial and school zones; it leads to reduced traffic jams in the
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, another benefit that might occur is when arranging to zone the areas, the
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 council is able to perform better community service throughout the town;
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 the origination that exists in the
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. In conclusion,
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 has some demerits, I firmly take the view that the merits
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 reducing the amount of traffic and well-organized
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 services would outweigh the cons.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Segregation
  • Urban areas
  • Residential
  • Commercial
  • Industrial
  • Systematic development
  • Amenity provision
  • Urban management
  • Pollution
  • Quality of life
  • Transportation costs
  • Environmental impact
  • Social segregation
  • Amenities
  • Services
  • Income neighborhoods
  • Vibrant
  • Accessible
  • Travel times
  • Social interaction
  • Mixed-use developments
  • Sustainable urban planning
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Public transport
  • Urban sprawl
  • Green spaces
  • Agricultural land
  • Biodiversity
  • Business hubs
  • Investments
  • Employment opportunities
  • Economic growth
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