Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

A
lot
of
people
live in their hometown,where they lived for many years and grow-up.I think
this
is
cause
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of their memories which happened there
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area of times age,and community can not be comfortable in other living closes.,
However
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we can stay in our home and take care of family,neighbours .There is an area of reasons why the community still live in their living closes.Maybe
this
person
can not leave his or her home and still live there, maybe
this
person
stayed there to take care of his or her family ,or maybe
this
person
has not got to move on.For ,example British crowd do not move to another place , it is kinda their tradition which provides along
this
time.And our growing up
also
takes a
lot
of our lives years ,only when we turn 18 we can move to another living closes,and after ,that we
also
came to our living close where we born.There are a
lot
of advantages to living in that place where we were born.We can easily talk with our neighbourhoods and know them well, and we
also
can trust them.I am Uzbek and in ,Uzbekistan a
lot
of
people
are live
on
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their hometown where they were born and it is our
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most important tradition to live with our family and take care
about
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them.Every
uzbek
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family had good
realationships
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relationships
with their neighbours
,
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because they know who is
this
person
, and
also
other
people
of course
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it is not
ipmortant
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important
to know are
there
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uzbeks
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or not ,they are
people
too.I
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really amazed because of
this
kind of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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