Some people say Technology has improved our world. do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays,

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society Says that automation has very increased all

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the world.

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, I believe that

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automation there are so many advantages

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coming to human life. My essay will examine the views in the upcoming paragraph.

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, because of scientific Knowledge people's lifestyle become easier compared to the past. And

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there are the same positive impacts

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using the machinery.

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, Most communities use their technical devices for learning, entertainment, study-related and so on.

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as computers, laptops,

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phones. And

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why they learn all kinds of knowledge in the whole world.

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, In the present days, All nations are watching the news by using a TV, by using phone apps, by in the newspapers And these all things are possible because of machinery.

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, The transport facility is very developed through to auto-machine.

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, society can easily travel at a cheaper price

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it is consuming our time to reach that place.

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, owing to automobiles humans are ordering their food online.

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, he or she ordered a meal on

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. They do not go anywhere the food is delivered within half an hour. In conclusion, I think that machinery has risen all over the world.

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, with the use of technology, he or she should not have to work hard or they do not have to put in

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extra effort.

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is how technology has blessed our lives.

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Make sure to fully address the prompt. Provide more specific examples and elaborate on how automation has improved human life. Address both advantages and potential drawbacks of automation.

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