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Recent research has shown that media like Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians. Which do yo consider to be the greater influence??

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The line graph provides information about the rate of crime in three different areas namely burglary, car theft and robbery in
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 of New Port
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 between 2003 and 2012. Overall, burglary showed
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 downward trend in crime, whereas car theft and robbery remained relatively stable. In
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 of Burglary,
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 of incidents were less than 3500 in 2003, which rose markedly to reach a peak of around 3750 in 2004, which
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 of nearly 1250, number of incidents. After that, it grew slowly to reach approximately 1500 in 2009 and remained stable at nearly 1500 in 2012.
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 car theft incidents numbers were roughly 2750 in 2003, which dropped dramatically to 2000 in 2006. The crime rate remained
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 till 2009, which
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 inclined to reach more than 2500 in 2010, ending up with a slight rise to 2750 in 2012.
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 of reported cases of robbery remained fluctuating starting from about 600 in 2003, to 750 in 2012.
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