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While people flood into big cities to seek jobs and happy life ,there is a tendency for people to move out .What problem do big cities have?

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Well, big metropolises are indeed an opportunity to find a
job
. You might find a
job
 that suits you very well, it is harder to find a
job
 which makes you happy, in smaller
cities
. There is a tendency to move into big
cities
 because you want a successful and happy life for your family. I am not saying that in the smaller
cities
 you won't be successful but, in the big
cities
, the chances are many more. When too many people move into big townships, it will of course bring concomitant problems some of which I am going to mention in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the
city
 will become busier than before and make it difficult for people to get around anywhere on time.
For example
, if you have an appointment somewhere in the
city
, it is going to take a while to get there.
Consequently
, if you are lucky you will be punctual, if not, you might be late for your appointment.
Secondly
, the cost of living will be higher in the big
city
, which actively demonstrates that you have to pay a lot more for services than you are used to paying in smaller towns. If you don't have a well-paid
job
, ensuring that everything is paid for is going to be a big problem.
Thirdly
,
cities
 are always very noisy, which means that you have to deal with constant and loud traffic noises. If you like silence and peace it would be a huge problem for you to live in a big
city
. To sum up, everything I would say for those who are happy and successful in the smaller
cities
, it wouldn't be a mistake to continue to stay there end enjoy their life in that environment.
Submitted by Leena Kapoor on

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  • Housing demand
  • Public services
  • Cost of living
  • Pollution levels
  • Air quality
  • Traffic congestion
  • Commuting
  • Crime rates
  • Income disparity
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  • Public transport
  • Green spaces
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