As public safety is of the highest importance. it is often necessary to test new products on animals. It is befter for a few animals to suffer than for human life to be placed at risk by untested products. To what extent do you agree with above?

Nowadays, the beauty industry is flourishing
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it has become a billion-dollar industry.
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are often used for
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experiment
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purposes of the newly launched
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for the sake of not harming human life. I strongly advocate
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the benefits will be covered in
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with, so many
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are launched in the market
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it's beauty or health wellness
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before launching
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into the market the testing
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to be done first. These tests are carried out on
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to see the reaction or to ensure the safety of the product for human use. The use of
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in research is essential for enabling scientists to discover new
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. Alternate methods won't show the results the same way as
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do and are not so reliable.
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, in the beauty
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the cosmetics are tested on rats before putting
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up for human use to avoid unwanted skin allergies or reactions because of the
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. If the product is put out for selling without
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it might have some inevitable side effects
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the company will have to pay a huge price for it.
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,it is good for
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animals
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to suffer rather than risk the lives of thousands of humans.
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, in
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covid pandemic situation where researchers from all around the world were desperately seeking
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vaccine.
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result
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so many tests were done on
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. In
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process
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so many
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died
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,
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have a shorter lifecycle than humans
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it is acceptable to experiment on them. In conclusion,
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do not have the cognitive ability or moral
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that humans do.
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, I believe putting a few lives of
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in danger is better than risking human life.

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task
Be more balanced. Acknowledge the other view and give a fair look at it.
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Plan your essay. Use a clear intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
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Use short, clear sentences. Use simple link words to show how ideas connect.
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The writer shows a clear stance on the topic.
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There are some good linking words like 'Moreover' and 'For instance'.
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