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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

#people #home
Nowadays feeling insecure has become increasingly a major crux for most of the demographics of
the
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society. There are several reasons why
people
 feel dangerous when they stay at home or go out.
this
 issue will be discussed in
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solution
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 that may be implemented to alleviate the problems. The major reasons are
relatively
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 high crime rate and unemployment. Day by day the number of drug addicts increasing rapidly, numerous causes behind it
such
 as failure in love poverty and unexpected job loss. So they become
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 and they commit stealing and robbing for money.
In addition
, unemployment is
also
 responsible for
this
 crux. Especially in
the
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developing countries, a large number of
people
 don't have any job so they get involved with illegal work.
For instance
, during the covid
pandemic
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 the crime rate increased in Namibia, which was nearly about 32% and their government
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 that
this
 situation happened
because
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 lack of workplace. These are the main factors why
people
 do not feel safe in their own place or public place. To solve
this
 problem some measures should be implemented. Government has to take steps
such
 as they have to provide training programs in order to ensure
skillful
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laborer
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.
Furthermore
, it is very necessary to install cameras
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the
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public places so citizens will feel
more
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safer than before.
For example
,
Caracas
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 the capital city of Venezuela , their authority claimed that the rate of crime decreased sharply after Cameras
installed
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 over
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several public places.
Although
 there are many factors that are responsible for
people
 who feel insecure at home or
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outside
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out side
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, the government is in the best position to solve the problem. The essay discussed
about
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various reasons why citizens are unsafe even at home and steps
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need
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 to be taken to tackle the problem.
This
 essay
also
 suggested some possible
solution
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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