Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

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Nowadays feeling insecure has become increasingly a major crux for most of the demographics of

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society. There are several reasons why

people

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feel dangerous when they stay at home or go out.

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essay along with some possible

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that may be implemented to alleviate the problems. The major reasons are

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high crime rate and unemployment. Day by day the number of drug addicts increasing rapidly, numerous causes behind it

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as failure in love poverty and unexpected job loss. So they become

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and they commit stealing and robbing for money.

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responsible for

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crux. Especially in

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developing countries, a large number of

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don't have any job so they get involved with illegal work.

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, during the covid

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the crime rate increased in Namibia, which was nearly about 32% and their government

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that

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situation happened

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lack of workplace. These are the main factors why

people

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do not feel safe in their own place or public place. To solve

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problem some measures should be implemented. Government has to take steps

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as they have to provide training programs in order to ensure

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laborer

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, it is very necessary to install cameras

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public places so citizens will feel

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safer than before.

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Caracas

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the capital city of Venezuela , their authority claimed that the rate of crime decreased sharply after Cameras

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over

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several public places.

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there are many factors that are responsible for

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who feel insecure at home or

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out side

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, the government is in the best position to solve the problem. The essay discussed

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various reasons why citizens are unsafe even at home and steps

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need

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to be taken to tackle the problem.

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essay

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suggested some possible

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some countries are strungling with increase in crime rates. Some berlive that having more police on the street is bestway to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The Best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years many small shops have closed, because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.