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The movement of people from agriculture areas to big cites has caused many problems at both places. What are the reasons for this problem and how can it be solved.

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The large scale movement of
people
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 from agricultural
areas
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 to bigger
cities
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 significantly increased in the past decade.
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 created a lot of
problems
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 in both agricultural
areas
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 and in big
cities
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.
Firstly
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,there are numerous
problems
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 and causes for the migration of
people
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 from agricultural
areas
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 to big
cities
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.Lack of return of investment in agriculture is one of the major issues in
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 sector and the climate changes
also
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 determine how well the production of goods goes.
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, If there's a sudden drought or flooding occurs
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 the agriculture sector's are completely in the hope of the aid of the government and there are very less chances of coming back up from the disaster they are facing especially if they are from a middle class.so,they move to big
cities
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 for a better living hood but over migration to
cities
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 cause the habitat of life per square inches
people
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 lives and pollution and low wages will become a bigger problem
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,there are various ways to tackle the
problems
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. The government can set up various organizations and schemes ,providing loans and funds to help the agriculture sector or the
people
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 ourselves can set up numerous plans and aid for the needy.If the
problems
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 of
people
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 moving to bigger
cities
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 still cause
problems
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then
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 there have to be strict rules and regulations or protocols to safeguard. To put it in a nutshell,there has been a lot of
problems
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 caused by the movement of
people
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 from agricultural
areas
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 to big
cities
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 and there are lots of ways we can overcome the
problems
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 from both sides with the help of the government and some planning better output for ourselves can tackle these
problems
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.
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