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some people believe that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 it is thought by some that
parents
 are responsible for teaching
children
 moral behaviours or how to be a good citizen in
society
, others consider that the
school
 is the place to learn
such
 things. In my opinion, I believe that each of them
have
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 their unique impact on
children
's nurturing.
To begin
, with
parents
 play a pivotal role in their
children
's life since
children
 are more likely to learn positive moral values of
the
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society
 from
there
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parents
.
Therefore
, the
parents
 are morally responsible for their
children
's
action
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. As
children
 are growing,
parents
 teach them right from wrong through discipline.
Consequently
, kids learn morality from their experiences at home.
Moreover
, the way they act on social events or in
school
 is
the
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of
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what they have learned from their mum and dad in the house.
On the other hand
, schools are
also
 responsible for
children
's growth as
a
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productive social
member
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members
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.
School
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 aim is to teach young people moral values
such
 as tolerance and sharing.
Furthermore
, schools prepare
children
 to be members of
society
.
Nonetheless
, many disruptive students come from an unstable family background which causes
in
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bad behaviours.
Hence
,
although
 educational institutions have the duty to teach
children
 how to be
a
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good
member
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 of
society
, families play a very important role in
this
 respect. In my opinion, despite people having different views on
this
 topic, I consider that both family and
school
 are responsible to make them ideal human beings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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