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The graph represents the number of
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 of
leisure
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 spent by working males and working females in a week during the
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 period from 1998-1999. So the graph depicts
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 comparison among various segments-people employed full
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 or part-
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, people who are unemployed, retired, housewives. Overall, females in every category are compared to males who are found only in three categories and who
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 enjoy more
leisure
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time
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 than females. There are around 6 -7
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 of difference in the
leisure
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time
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 that
men
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 enjoy more than women in all the categories where
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 a comparison is made. In the case of
men
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 who are employed full-
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 have a
leisure
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 period of around 45
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 per week, for unemployed
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, the same is about 85
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 and for retired
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, it is around 82.
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, women in the same sectors spend 6 to 7
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 lesser recreation
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 i.e around 37
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 and 78
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 for the latter two categories. 
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, the women who are employed part-
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 and are housewives find themselves having 40 and 50
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 respectively of free
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