In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves.

This
diagram provides information about the manufacture of frozen
fish
pies and the main
ingredients
of frozen
fish
pies. The main
ingredients
of a
fish
pie consist of peas, fresh
salmon
, sauce, and sliced
potatoes
. For preparing process of
potatoes
, the
potatoes
which are used have to deliver up to 1 month in advance. Taking those
potatoes
cleans, peels, and slices. After getting sliced
potatoes
take those
potatoes
for boiling and chilling before storing them until using them for cooking a
fish
pie. In the process of preparing fresh
salmon
, we have to use fresh
salmon
which deliver to our factory within 12 hours or less and we have to employ a lot of labours and inspectors in order to remove waste disposal on fresh
salmon
and examine the quality of work from our labours. The
first
method of preparing fresh
salmon
is that we will use lemon juice and salt to fresh
salmon
in order to reduce the smelly scent. After that method, we will take them for cooking by using a steam oven.
Next
, we will operate our labours in order to remove skin and bones from steamed
salmon
. After
this
, inspectors will examine the work before using it in the
next
method.
Then
, we have to prepare peas and sauce. After preparing the
ingredients
, we will use those
ingredients
for mixing them together. After mixing the
ingredients
, a
fish
pie is wrapped and frozen before storing and dispatching to other places.
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