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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that we do not choose to eat
meat
 or
fish
 resulting in a lot of benefits to our,
such
 as getting good
health
 or helping the environment of the world better.
However
, I strongly disagree with
such
 a belief. Some groups of people deciding not to consume
meat
 or
fish
 will make their
health
 good and make the natural environment and the world become a better place to live in. They decide to eat
food
that is
 not produced from
meat
 or
fish
,
such
 as soil beans, vegetables, or fruits,
instead
. They believe that they make the correct decision to eat
this
 type of
food
, which makes the world turn better and helps nature and animals become safe. They think that deciding not to consume
meat
 or
fish
food
 will help their
body
 become robust and will get enough nutrients for their
body
.
In contrast
, most people, including me, believe that getting good
health
 have to eat beneficial
food
, including
meat
 and
fish
. As
meat
 and
fish
 consist of essential protein and nutrients for their
body
, these nutrients and protein make their
body
 healthier and more energetic.
Moreover
, I think that populations who make the decision to consume
meat
 and
fish
 do not cause a negative effect on the earth.
For example
, we can use animal dung or waste things that we get from animals to make fertilizers for planting trees. In sum, I truly disagree with
this
 idea that not eating foodstuff which is made from animals will have a negative impact on our
body
 and the earth. I consider that humans should eat beneficial
food
 and not eat a lot of meals so that it will harm our
health
.
Besides
, I consider that we can use waste things or foodstuff in order to make many benefits to the earth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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