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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The visual below exhibits the changes that a park from 1980 has gone through until the present day.
Overall
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, in 1980, the area was protected by a fence and a brick wall, which made it inhabited and nature-dominated.
However
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, nowadays, it has completely shifted and it has turned into a lively place, full of tables and with people of all ages interacting with each other. In 1980, after crossing the fence, there was only one pathway available in the playground. Either looking to the left or to the right, you would see the same landscape, which was daisies growing around.
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, by walking onwards, there would be four benches with a tiny lake in the middle separating them.
Further
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 right, there were three gigantic trees. Nowadays, the scenery has changed.
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 to the disappearance of the barriers, there are four possible routes to enter the square.
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, the region is more populated than it was in the past. There are two children playing football by the garden's previous fence, and a large group of adults having a barbecue in the area that used to be completely green
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 the presence of the trees. Today, the place still has three trees , but they are fairly smaller in comparison to the ones in the past.
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, the park continues to be fairly green in spite of its opening to the public.

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task
Task response: Give a clear view of the changes. Put past facts first, then present facts, and end with a short comparison.
task
Task response: Use only facts from the image. Do not add things not shown.
coherence
Coherence: Put ideas in order. Start with an overall view, then describe past, then present, and finish with a summary.
cohesion
Coherence: Use joining words to link ideas (and, but, also, therefore) and stay in the same time frame.
grammar
Grammar: check sentence form and punctuation. Watch plural verbs and spaces before commas.
structure
Clear opening that shows the main change.
content
Good attempt to compare past and present features.
content
Some specific details (fence, benches, lake, trees) are given.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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