In modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With growing awareness of protecting
animals
, some
people
suggest that it is inappropriate to use
animals
for consumption. I am afraid that I can not agree with
this
opinion since some
people
have no choice whether to use
animals
as products or not, and
animals
play an essential role in plenty of fields’ research. Some
people
are incapable of abandoning hunting as their primary means of accessing food and products made from
animals
since their areas are not suitable for developing agriculture or industry.
Hence
hunting is the only industry they rely on for survival.
For instance
, a village, Liuzhou, famous for its Dog Meat Festival, was accused by eco-friendly groups and institutions of being a community of murderers.
However
, the tradition here formed due to its unsuitable soil condition for cultivating crops and its inconvenient public transportation system for developing a commercial market. Until coming up with any solution to resolve
this
issue, asking those
people
to give up their only source of financial support is unfair.
Furthermore
, being completely against
animals
as productions prevent technology from developing, particularly in the medical area. Many critical medicines are extracted from
animals
’ bodies, and to cite an example, scientists keep trying to use pigs’ hearts to take the place of
people
's hearts which might contribute to the heart disease area when the experiment succeeds.
Moreover
, many significant medical discoveries involved animal experimentation because
animals
’ DNA and physical composition are more similar to humans’ structure than plants’ parts. Using these
animals
as objectives can ensure the safety and effectiveness of new drugs or new surgeries. Overall, even though
people
should protect
animals
, some
people
need to eat
animals
or sell their prey to survive, along with some fields needing
animals
for experiments.
Therefore
, animal products will not be banned until equally effective alternatives have been developed.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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