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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads

#governments #money #railways #roads
The government should allocate more budget on railways than on roads. I strongly agree with
this
.it can be beneficial for both
people
 and our environment. There are some reasons and one of
that
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 is because, They are
more safe
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 than other ways
for
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of
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 moving from one place to another,especially for long distances.They
also
 are less harmful than
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a car
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car
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 to
environment
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 ,so they do not produce much carbon emissions and other toxic gases. We would have
less
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 car accidents.
Becuase
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Because
 they don’t face
another
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 vehicles or blocks in their path. Another reason is that railways are
more
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faster and cheaper . They
also
 have an effect on our saving time and money,so we can allocate our time or money on our other programs. They have much more place and move more amount of
people
 to their
destination s
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,and it’s economically efficient. Some
people
 believe that the quality of services may decrease because of the low prices but we can choose those that have good services with high quality. In conclusion,it is useful for
people
 to
spent
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 more money on railways than on roads.Because
,
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they are more safe and fast.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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