There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of country more important than the international music that is head everywhere nowadays?

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is everywhere in society. From coffee shops to elevators to working out at the gym,
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is around us and playing constantly.
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is needed for society to function.
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and foremost,
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helps you relax. When I have insomnia and can't sleep, I put on lullaby
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and it always puts me to sleep. I am not the only one who feels the same
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; I have read hundreds if not thousands of blogs recommending different kinds of
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that make sleeping easier.
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,
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is used as a
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to make friends. There are many online forums and gatherings based on
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as concerts and
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festivals. Many people go to these
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concerts to make friends. If
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you like K-Pop
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and go to a BTS
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with others who like BTS, you have a common language to speak:
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. In general, people not only like
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from their own country
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but
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international
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. I believe that international
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is the
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of the future. Since English is becoming a language spoken all around the world,
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from other countries is becoming more and more infused with English words.
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could
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be used to help political tension. One example of
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helping ease political tension is when a K-Pop band Girls Generation went to North Korea and did a
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North Korean President Kim Jong Un.
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helped connect the
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secluded North Korea to the world and because of
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, North Koreans became less secluded and even attended an Olympics for the
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time in over 50 years of their existence. In conclusion, international
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is more ubiquitous and accessible to people because of the Internet. Thirty to fifty years ago, the only
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to hear South Korean
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was to go to South Korea and buy
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vinyl, CD, or cassette tape. Now, all you have to do is go to youtube.com and type in "South Korean
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" and hundreds of thousands if not millions of results will pop up.
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