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As public safety is of the highest importance. it is often necessary to test new products on animals. It is befter for a few animals to suffer than for human life to be placed at risk by untested products. To what extent do you agree with above?

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Nowadays, scientists prefer to examine new
products
 on
animals
 rather than
humans
 to save
humans
 from any danger that can occur due to the new product. I do not agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with,
firstly
,
animals
 have the same rights as
humans
 to live in
this
 world.
Animals
 cannot describe their pain verbally but
humans
 can do that.
Secondly
, so, if science tries new
products
 on
humans
instead
 of
animals
, it will be a good idea.
Humans
 can tell them about the allergies, demerits of the product.
On the other hand
, the new
products
 can destroy human life if they have been implemented without any research.
Animals
 depend on
humans
 and if
humans
 will be in danger, the
animals
 will not be able to survive. In conclusion, both have their own precious lives. It is better to try new
products
 on that thing which will not hurt rather than using on
humans
 or
animals
.
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