We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some homeless population, National boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need
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as long as there are problems in our own society. I disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
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view because I believe that we should try to help as many society
as possible. On the one hand, I accept that it is important to help our neighbours and fellow citizens. In most ,communities there are Change to a plural noun
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are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. It is possible to findCorrect pronoun usage
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for example
, in even the wealthiest of cities, and for those who are concerned about this
problem, there are usually opportunities to volunteer time or give money to support these
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In the UK, folk can help in a variety of ways, from donating clothing to serving free food in a soup kitchen. As the problems are on our doorstep, and there are obvious ways to help, I can understand why some Change preposition
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, when children are dying from curable diseases in African
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite