We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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believe that we should not help
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in other
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as long as there are problems in our own society. I disagree with
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as possible. On the one hand, I accept that it is important to help our neighbours and fellow citizens. In most ,communities there are
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who
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are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. It is possible to find
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homeless population,
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, in even the wealthiest of cities, and for those who are concerned about
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public.
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In the UK, folk can help in a variety of ways, from donating clothing to serving free food in a soup kitchen. As the problems are on our doorstep, and there are obvious ways to help, I can understand why some
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feel that we should prioritise local charity. At the same time, I believe that we have an obligation to help those who live beyond our national borders. In some
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the problems that people face are much more serious than those in our own communities, and it is often even easier to help.
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, when children are dying from curable diseases in
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region, governments and individuals in richer land can save lives simply by paying for vaccines that already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a much greater impact than helping in our local area. In conclusion, it is true that we cannot help everyone, but in my opinion
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National boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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