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Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that education specialists say that every
child
 should be taught to play a musical
instrument
 (it is important …). I completely agree with
this
 idea, because it develops many skills of a
child
. All-round development is very important for a
child
. Most
children
 have huge energy that needs to be
channeled
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 into creativity. Learning to play a musical
instrument
 develops motor skills of the fingers and improves the sense of rhythm. Improvement of concentration and memory development are
also
 positive aspects of
this
 training, which might be helpful in the future,
this
 training will help in other creative activities - dancing and singing.
Also
, the
child
 often communicates with other
children
 when playing musical instruments in an ensemble, cooperates better with them and socializes faster. In adulthood,
children
 will find it easier to find common topics with their peers, create a musical group and take part in most school or university activities.
On the other hand
, if the
child
 does not want to play a musical
instrument
,
then
 you need to listen to him. He can be offered to play another
instrument
 or change
music
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 school. Most often,
children
 like to play the
instrument
 and they are only afraid of solfeggio classes. But even
this
 fear and dislike can be overcome with the help of experienced teachers who can turn a difficult learning process into a game.
Therefore
, listening to the
child
, you can always find a musical
instrument
 that he will like. In conclusion, some educationalists are not mistaken in
this
 idea, playing a musical
instrument
 is very good at developing many skills in
children
 and is a very good investment
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