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Many governments think that economic progress is theri most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country

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Various governments support the idea that the vital aim for their
countries
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 and themselves is economic
progress
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, while others support the idea that other types of
progress
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 are as important as economic
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. I will describe my opinion and give some details about
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 topic in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. It is undeniable that the economy of their
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 in the governments' perspectives is the most significant thing as the financial can bring many facilities and good things for their areas.
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, when their
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 have good finances, they can spend money for renovating some convenient services in order to give more comfort to their citizens. It is apparent that numerous
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 as the United Kingdom which is one of the developed
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 give conveniences to their folks including a number of comfortable public transportations.
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, other
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 is as vital as economic.
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, education is one of the important things that the authorities should pay attention to because the number of children nowadays will lead their
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 to successful
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 in the future when they grow.
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 the economy in
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 country is the best when compares with others, they do not have good tuition and do not have enough effective teenagers.
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, the future of
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 country's profitability will be gone down, and the effort of the authorities are useless. To conclude, every coin has two sides.
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, every
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 in all of the
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 around the world is equally crucial for their
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 including economic and education depending on population's aspects.

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