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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent years, there has been a breakthrough means of transportation in order to support the growing population. Some people argue that investing in
railways
 would be beneficial, while others claim that improvements to highways would be more effective for overall transportation. I agree that the government should spend money on
railways
 more than
roads
. On the one hand, improving and constructing new
roads
 might increase the use of private vehicles
such
 as motorcycles and cars.
In addition
, cars could occupy fewer
passengers
 than
trains
.
Consequently
,
this
 could lead to various environmental issues
such
 as air pollution and traffic congestion.
Furthermore
, the numbers of road accidents and highway casualties are far higher than that of railway due to lower safety measures.
On the other hand
, the extension of the railway to cater to larger areas of any city considerably helps solve the traffic congestion problems on highways since one train cold occupy many
passengers
.
Additionally
, it could cause less environmental pollution in comparison to transportation on
roads
. Apart from
this
, the
railways
also
 provide a fixed schedule.
Thus
, passenger can plan their itineraries.
Lastly
, using
trains
 has no traffic congestion and is faster than cars and buses.
Hence
, the
passengers
 could arrive at their destination on time. To conclude, it can be clearly seen that improving rails is far more beneficial than
roads
 since
trains
 cause comparatively fewer environmental issues.
In addition
,
trains
 could
also
 occupy more
passengers
 and provide fixed schedules.
Moreover
, travelling on
railways
 could cause fewer accidents.
Therefore
, improving
trains
 would be more effective.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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