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in Some Areas Of The US Teenagers Are Not Allowed To Be Out Of Doors After a Particular Time At Night unless they are accompanied by an adults

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The Government of the US is concerned for the safety and well being of youngsters which is why they imposed a curfew to ensure the safety of teenagers. I am a strong advocate of
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 approach and I'll discuss my point of view in subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, crimes against youngsters are increasing day by day. There is a huge possibility of abduction of teens late at night as the streets are quite deserted at midnight.
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, as these adolescents are capable of making wrong decisions or being lured by a stranger it is necessary to be cautious and must one must not allow children to leave the house alone at dawn without being accompanied by an adult.
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,
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 is a smart approach of government to keep children safe from unwanted situations and crimes rates will
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 be under control with
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 practice.
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, teenagers attending late night clubs can get influenced by drugs as the use of drugs in clubs of the US is well known to everyone.
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 might result in dropping out from academics or getting low grades eventually having an adverse effect on the future of young life which will
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 affect the country's economy as the young generation will get into more drug use rather than helping with the nation's economic growth. In conclusion, curfew against
young
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 generation is necessary for their safety and even they feel the need to go out an adult must go along with them.
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 approach by higher authorities will ensure teenagers will not face any unpleasant experiences.
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