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Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten

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globalisation is observed in economic and political systems. The inflation in which we are living is in
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 of the population. I believe that everyone should have equal rights. No matter
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the faith or the colour
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, we are all one on
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 planet.
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, cultural globalisation is seen in how different cultures blend together, wearing similar clothing, in
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 there won't be
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 separation between the people. Everybody should be better, including the politicians. The prices and the rights shouldn't be different for the people from
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