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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some
people
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 that advertising is the most effective way to invite
people
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 to purchase
goods
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.Other
people
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 take the opposite view that the
quality
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 of
products
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 is more essential than advertisements.In my opinion,advertising can both affect and unaffected
people
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 based on their perspectives. On the one hand,there are many reasons why most companies want to advertise their
products
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.
Firstly
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,some
people
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 believe that the brand of
products
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 which is the most important to convince
people
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 is advertised by businesses.
For example
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,celebrities always promote,so most
people
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 who regard them as idols or heroes are likely to imitate them,even whether
products
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 that their use or something that they promote because they want to look so good as well as their idols.
In addition
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,persuading
people
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 by reducing the prices of
goods
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 is the most practical way to make a high sale.
Moreover
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,the majority of the population completely prefer
products
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 which are cheaper and it is made by promotions
such
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 as buy one get one free.
Therefore
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,advertising seems to be the best method to convince
people
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 to expenditure
goods
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.
On the other hand
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,some
people
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 are not affected by advertising because they believe that the most effective factor in choosing
products
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 is their value of them.
Although
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 they do not promote their
goods
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 via advertising,most
people
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 insist to buy them.
For instance
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,food
products
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such
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 as meats,fish or vegetables are the basis of our consumption,so many residents purchase them mainly because of the
quality
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.If they promote these
products
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,but they are not in good condition,consumers will blame them,so they lack qualities of
products
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.
Thus
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,these
people
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 completely select their
products
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 because of their value and
quality
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. In conclusion,advertising may extremely convince some
people
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 to buy
goods
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 because of attractiveness.
However
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,other
people
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 believe that
quality
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 is the priority.In my view,it relies on
people
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's attitudes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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