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The spread of multinational companies and globalization is increasing with time. Some people say that it will bring positive effects for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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The advancement of multinational
companies
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 and
globalization
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 is increasing across the world so according to some
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 trend has a positive impact on both the individual and country. In my opinion, I agree that the proliferation of multinational business and
globalization
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 will produce unprecedented results for the
people
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. With the investments of multinational
companies
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 in the local markets, the problem of unemployment is eradicated.
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, IBM India offered hired thousands of fresh graduates and experienced professionals
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 year. Due to
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,
people
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 have been earning handsome salaries and eventually, their lifestyle has improved to a greater extent. They can now easily handle their family expenses and
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 their needs.
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 developments,
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, generate better results for the
people
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 as these
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 provide them ample employment opportunities. Another point to consider is that the spread of the conglomerates helped especially developing countries to manufacture foreign goods locally which eventually bolster their economy.
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, the import of foreign goods in China reduced
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 year as most of the global
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 have set up their factories there locally.
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, there is an outstanding growth in their GDP that made them one of the prosperous nations on
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 planet.
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,
globalization
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 fosters the tourism industry, thereby, promoting a better understanding of other cultures. Experiencing different ways of life, discovering new food and customs will significantly help
people
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 to gain knowledge and respect for other cultures. In conclusion, the proliferation of multinationals and
globalization
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 plays a vital role in the growth of the nation's economy.
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, it not only assist in the proper utilization of human resources but
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people
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 get insights about different cultures.
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