Some people believe that nowadays we have many choices. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays some
people
say that we have many
choices
. I completely agree with
this
opinion because of developing the technology and improvement of
food
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the food
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industry. Technology has been
effect
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effective
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in many aspects
such
as
work
and study so
people
have many
choices
.
For example
, a student who lives in Iran can study in
other country
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another country
other countries
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such
as Canada, so
his
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he
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can study anywhere that he like and
growth
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grow
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her knowledge.
In addition
, nowadays
people
can
work
in a place which is not a
work-place
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workplace
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such
as home
caffe
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Caffe
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or some places like
this
.
For instance
, in
pandemic
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pandemics
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because of
danger
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the danger
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of getting ill,
people
don’t go to
work
and
the
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apply
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work
remotely.
Furthermore
, there are many vegan
people
(who don’t like eating meat or using
the
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apply
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product
which
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apply
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made from animals) and they can live much easier than past because of the improvement of
food
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the food
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industry now. In the
past
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,past
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if someone
want
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wants
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to be a vegan person he hurt
to
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apply
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his health due to the lack of getting essential nutrients so he has not
many
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have many
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choices
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as to
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to
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about
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what
his
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he
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like
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liked
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to eat.
However
, some
people
think they should
can
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apply
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do anything that they want so because of some law they
have
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do have
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not many
choices
, but if anyone
want
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wants
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so anything a disorder
is happened
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happens
has happened
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and it is bad.
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  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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