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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

#computer #effects #children
Life
 is impossible without the latest technologies and one of them is the
computer
. Some segments of society argue that
side
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 effects of
computer
use
 are
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 as compared to the benefits in our
children
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children's
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 lives. I completely agree with it and we will discuss some reasons in
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Firstly
 ,
mental
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the mental
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 and physical health of
adolescent
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adolescents
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 is being affected by
usage
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the usage
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 of
computer
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computers
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.
Children
 spend most of the time in front of computers to play games or
watching
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 cartoons. They have lost their
intrest
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interest
 in education and other curriculum activities. Basically,
mind
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 train itself
accoridng
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according
 to the
enviroment
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environment
. When
children
 will watch
articial
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artificial
 things, they will visualize themselves as they watch
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computer
 games or movies.
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result
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a result
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, their mental growth to explore
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new things will be stopped.
Secondly
, social
life
 is
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 due to
highly
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use
 of
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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.
Children
use
 social media
platform
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platforms
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 to communicate with others.
Face
 to
face
 interaction is reducing day by day.
Therefore
,
children
 cannot perform in public because they have 0% confidence to interact with
peole
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people
.
For instance
, there are two
children
,
first
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 one who
perfroms
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performs
 everything like study, making friends, communication with others through
computer
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the computer
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.
In contrast
,
second
 who is good in social
life
. He attends live gatherings,
perform
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 in live public never
look
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looking
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 like the
first
 one. Eventually,
usage
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the usage
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 of
computer
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affects
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effects
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affects
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 our social
life
 in both direct
or
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and
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 indirect ways. In conclusion,
children
 should
use
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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 but for
beneficial
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a beneficial
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purpose
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purposes
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. Parents should make a
schedual
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schedule
 to play games or watch
cartoon
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cartoons
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.
Children
 should
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be expert
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expert
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experts
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 in
face
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the face
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 to
face
 interaction
instead
 of digital communication. My point of view
is rely
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relies
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 on the statement that
computer
use
 has more disadvantages than advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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