Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

It is becoming more popular to move from smaller cities to bigger ones due to developments.
This
trend can cause some
troubles
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for
people
themselves and their nutrition.
This
will discuss
about
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the problems and provide
its
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solutions.
To begin
with, the
increasingly
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amount of
people
who leave villages means that
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labor
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force will decrease as well. All
product
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including vegetables, fruits and others come to town all over from there, small towns need the
people
to work
otherwise
there will
ne
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be
deficit od products. Another problem is that all public
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will be crowded, constructors cannot handle
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of
people
and built
building
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and facilities as much as
it
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needed. Individuals coming to the
urbans
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urban
create a problem for themselves. What can
people
do
solve
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that issues?
First
of all, it is believed that working
is
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farm
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and growing crops is low paid work, so government should realize it and
rise
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their salary.
This
will wile citizens to work there
instead
of moving.
Also
, to avoid overflow,
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should
also
develop villages, and attractions there and make
it
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more comfortable. If residents of
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will earn as much as city dwellers and
also
live as good as them, there would be no
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of leaving their hometown. In conclusion, everyone doing bad for themselves and others around
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moving,
thus
everyone should understand it, especially
government
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. It needs only two things to stop that troubles, there are big earning for citizens of
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the countryside
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and building facilities for them too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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