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Some people think the government should establish free libraries in each town. Other believe that it is a waste of money since people can access the Internet to obtain information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A group of individuals presents the view that the government should construct free
libraries
 in each town, whereas the other group thinks that it is an impractical idea when everyone can read through the
Internet
. I strongly agree with the latter opinion. On the one hand, some
people
 justifiably argue that the
Internet
 is a time-efficient and economical way of reading because there are different websites and search engines that provide so many
books
 and files for reading and
people
 can search their topics online everywhere they are and read it whenever they please.
Therefore
, there is no need to go to
libraries
 by private cars or public transportation and read
books
 or other things. They correctly argue that
instead
 of spending time in traffic,
people
 can save their time to read more.
For example
, if a city dweller wants to read about the history of a place, he does not need to go out, and he can use his cellphone and search for the subject and read it more easily.
On the other hand
, another group of
people
 claims that
libraries
 are places where more
books
 have and magazines and their collections are more complete than the
books
 uploaded on the
Internet
. They insist that sometimes they have to pay a fee for reading a book.
However
 I do not find
this
 argument convincing as there are some famous websites that uploaded a large number of
books
, magazines, and even old newspapers, individuals can find anything on the
Internet
. Since
libraries
 receive payment for membership, they are not completely cheap and free and
in addition
, paying for oil and transportation is more costly than buying a book online. In conclusion, in my view, spending money on building
libraries
 in every town is a futile action because individuals can use the
Internet
 to read easily and without time and space limitations.
Moreover
, going to
libraries
 are more costly than reading online.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public libraries
  • community centers
  • educational programs
  • democratize access
  • socio-economic status
  • resources
  • reliable internet access
  • digital infrastructure
  • forward-thinking
  • technological advancements
  • digital literacy
  • online educational resources
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