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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sport person or musician. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.

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People
 who
was
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 born with
talents
 in something like playing
sport
 or music can help them learn easier and they can achieve
the
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 goal faster. On other hand, some children can be good at them if they have
learn
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 since they
was
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childhood
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in childhood
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.
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 details of both views for
this
 argument will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Regarding children have a good memory. Their brain
are
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 fresh and can get
the
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information more than adults. They can learn and
practice
 something easier. If
people
 start to learn something like
sport
 or music when they were children, they can be successful even though they do not have certain
talents
. The more they
practice
, the more they are a good player. Even though
people
 who
practice
 hard with
sport
 or music without certain
talents
,
they
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can have achievement but it takes more
time
 than
people
 who have
talents
.
People
 with
talents
 are more
advantage
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.
People
 with talent can be easier to learn and do not need to
practice
 so much
comparing
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compared
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between
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to
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people
 who do not have it
with
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at
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same
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the same
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 age and
same
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the same
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time
.
People
 without
talents
 must be so tried and takes
a
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apply
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such
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much
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 more
time
 to be successful. In conclusion, everyone can be good
in
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at
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 something without certain
for example
 a good
sport
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sports
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 player or musician but they need more
practicing
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practising
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 and take more
time
 than
people
 who have
certain
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a certain
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talent
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talents
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.
Moreover
, despite
of
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achievement with
sport
 or
musir
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music
 or other, they must love to do it and they pay attention
with
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to
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 it.
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