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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? high tuition fees supporting family What solutions can you suggest? grants , scholarships , apply for less courses in each semester

#students #work #results #time #education #pressure #tuition #fees #grants #scholarships #courses #semester
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the issue of working and studying at the same has been
widly
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widely
wildly
depated
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departed
debated
 . while some hold the view that it's important to be independent and be
incharge
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in charge
 of your own expenses while studying , others believe that it can badly affect the
students
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' academic achievements . I believe that a student should focus on one purpose and do the best they can in it .
to begin
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alot
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a lot
 of effort and time
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,
students
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 still
work
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 beside studying . As for many despite the fact that they got the score to be a part of the university ,they still need
a high tuition fees
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a high tuition fee
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 to pay .
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 ,
students
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 who are in medical school usually have numerous exams and stress but
still
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work
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 to pay the fees and sometimes
supporting
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support
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 their
family
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families
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.What can be said is getting a
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bachelor
bacholer
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bacholer's
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 degree can be a struggle to some .
moreover
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, solutions have to take place as soon as possible to give the space for
students
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 to study efficiently ,
students
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 of today are the professionals of tomorrow
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, we need to
facillitate
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facilitate
 their life so that they can study harder and be better in their fields .
this
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 can be done by giving grants and scholarships
for
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to
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students
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 in need so they can drop the idea of studying
beside
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besides
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work
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 . A prime example is giving some
students
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 an exemption on fees loans .
hence
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,
this
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 will make
students
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 focus more on their studies . in conclusion , It can be reiterated that studying is more pivotal than working as society needs better professionals . Not only does
work
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 take up most of the time , but
also
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 use effort as well . so society and the government should reduce the burden on
students
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 by helping them through their years of study .
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