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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a fact that smoking is injurious to health and many peoples are well aware of smoking's dangerous effects but still, they continue to satisfy their personal needs
of
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 smoking. there are a number of causes and some possible solutions for
this
 problem.
First
 of all the main cause of have smoking is
stress
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the stress
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 level of
people
 is
increased
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 day by day. and smoking is
expensive
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 habit to kill
people
 and increase pollution which is bad for the environment. smoking cause some serious disease which is very dangerous
that
is
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 cancer and all peoples are well
known
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 about that but still they don't quit smoking. in today's world, the younger
people
 find smokers because some are considered
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a style and others are doing that to be fit in a social group where all have to do smoking.
Secondly
, we discussed how to reduce smoking in societies so to avoid
people
 from smoking government should impose high taxes on these products for that it is not affordable for everybody. and
also
 advertisements can
also
 be banned which shows that smoking will not harmful to their health. another solution is putting up advertising posters or banners
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negative
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 effects of tobacco in all cities or markets where
people
 can easily view
this
 And smokers will
also
 try some
alternate
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that which helps in reducing the habit of smoking In conclusion,
advertisement
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advertisements
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 and increasing pressure are the main factors that encourage
people
 to start smoking,
therefore
, everyone should do everything which can reduce the number of smokers in our society and the government
also
 take some action against the factories which make that product.
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