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Production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases has a heating effect on the atmosphere and result in global warming. Why global warming is considered one of the most serious issues nowadays? How this problem can be solved?

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Climate change resulted from the effect of heat on the atmospheric weather due to excessive production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse
gases
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, climate change is viewed as one of the most serious problems in recent times, in my
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 I will suggest ways to which global warming can be dealt with, in the following passages.
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 with, the rate of global warming is really alarming, due to the excessive production of various end product
gases
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 in the environment. There are various ways in which theses waste can be minimized from the environment
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, avoid deforestation because plants helped to absorb wastes like carbon dioxide from the environment thereby minimizing the volume of these end products of
gases
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 from the atmosphere
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 it is advisable to plant more crops and flowers to aid the process,
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, encourage the use of electric cars in places where they are found and in others part of the world where there are no electric cars, people should use public transport or learn how to ride bicycles which is
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 a very good form of exercise that can make an individual physically and mentally fit.
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, the government should encourage the media to place adverts on television and various social media networks like Facebook, Instagram and Twitter to encourage the public to withdraw from activities that could lead to pollution of the atmosphere thereby causing climate change, and minimizing the rate at which people migrate to a particular place in other to avoid overcrowding which is
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 a cause of global warming. In ,conclusion the rate of global warming is on the increase, due to excessive carbon dioxide and other waste product of
gases
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 in the atmosphere as discussed above the government and the individual has a key role in ensuring that
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 issue is solved by following some of the solutions mentioned above.
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