Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is thought that
,
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it is more advantageous to invest money
on
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in
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railway
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the railway
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sector rather than
roads
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on roads
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.I completely agree with
this
opinion and think that governments should spend money on railways.
First
of all, our population is the
biggest
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for
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our
country
.In
this
small
country
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we have a huge population
over
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180 million.
Everyone
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of us
must
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just
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need to travel
one
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place to another for many needed.For that
reason
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we need to use public
transport
.
Railway
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is one of the
way
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ways
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where we can travel with
huge
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a huge
the huge
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amount of people in a single
time
.
Secondly
, we can save
our
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valuable
time
by using rail as our
transport
.We live in a society where everyone is running
for
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his own business.So if we
wants
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to live a good life
then
we must need to use our
time
properly and everyone knows
train
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the train
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is a
transport
system which is known for its timing.
Thirdly
, by using road
vehicle
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vehicles
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in our
country
minimum 25+ people died in
accident
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accidents
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everyday
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. No one gives any kind of think about
this
topic.Just using
alot
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a lot
of
bus
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buses
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and transports makes these kinds of
blunder
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which impact falling into many families
everyday
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.So
this
problem
could
be solve
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by using
train
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trains
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except
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road
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
Lastly
,
i
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believe that traffic jam is the most hated
problem
for
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any
country
.
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in
Bangladesh
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we cannot avoid
this
word
from
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our day to day life.We have to waste our
time
in
this
incident for many hours every day.But if are not paying any interest in road
vehicle
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vehicles
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like local buses,
than
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then
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this
problem
could solve easily.We can use
train
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the train
a train
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as our main
transport
and can solve the major
problem
for our society and economical
problem
for our underdeveloping
country
. In
conclusion
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we can say that
,
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spending money on
railway
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the railway
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means more
train
availability,more timely arrival, more beautiful environment
on
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in
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railway
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the railway
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sector and the improvement of
railway
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the railway
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means
huge
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a huge
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amount of people could lead
there
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life happily and they can enjoy a
country
without traffic and developed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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