In the last decade, there has been a great increase in international travel .what do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

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countries
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,international
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people
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to increase countries economy.
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with foreign
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life. International world
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people
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culture they can
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country
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. To sum up,
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as well as they wanted to know
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so
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international
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countries
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economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affordability
  • Emerging economies
  • Disposable income
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Interconnected
  • Cultural exchange
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Carbon footprint
  • Heritage preservation
  • Economic growth
  • Burgeoning middle class
  • Online booking platforms
  • Travel apps
  • Social media influence
  • Global understanding
  • Cultural impact
  • Sustainable travel
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