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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few people think that fixed punishments should be given for each type of crime and
also
,some say that a misdoing should be judged depending upon the circumstances of an individual
offence
 and motivation for committing it.In my personal opinion, a character should be judged depending upon the situation and aim of the
offence
.In,
this
 I will discuss both these views and give my opinion. According to a few
people's
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,mind a constant penalise men will reduce the amount of misdoing activity.Because by judging according to the type of crime the human will fear doing the act again.So, it leads to a reduction of
offence
 activity which will lead to a healthy society.
For instance
,an article published in the BBC newspaper shows that fixed deprivation has helped developing nations control
offence
 activities.
Lastly
,others say that
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somebody should be
offenced
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offence
offered
 depending upon the circumstances of a human-like the economic background of his family leading him to commit the misdoing.Owing to his economical situation an individual acts in an
offence
 to help his family in a financial manner.
Thus
,a man should be punished depending upon circumstances because it helps them to learn a lesson and gives him an opportunity to start a new life.
For example
,a study conducted in the USA reveals that many humans believe that an individual should be punished depending upon the rationale of his infraction. In my opinion,I believe that a guy cannot do a crime without
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proper consideration.So according to their intent for his ,misdoing an individual should be judged In conclusion,the fixed
punsihment
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punishment
 really helps in reducing
offence
however
 a man should be offended depending upon the impulse of his misdoing which is a more diplomatic way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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