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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays transportation has become an integral part of people's lives.It is vital that
transportation
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 system will be rapidly changed day by day.
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,
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 will great success for new innovation.I believe that
this
 will create a positive
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 on society rather than
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negative
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impact
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this
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i
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 will examine the benefits and downsides of
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 phenomenon and
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provude
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provide
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 opinion. Generally speaking,people can easily save their
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 lifestyle that spends
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most of their
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time
 in traffic congestion. Some scholars argue that most
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the
human
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 spend their
time
 on the roads,but in
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 if scientists implement
driverless
car
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cars
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 for transportation
structure
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 that will save
tair
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their
time
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also
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traffic congestion. As an example
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 automatic ubar
some
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 areas.as well as that has great
benifit
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benefit
benefits
impact
 for society. Unlike in the
past
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 the traffic congestion less in
furure
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future
 that will
be vanish
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 and flocks will get more benefit
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 to before. Despite
this
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arguments
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are
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also
various
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the various
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advantage
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that
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the most significant
advantages
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is
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 global accident rate can be reduced
modern
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in modern
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reader
rader
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 active vehicles while most of the accidents that happen around the glove
based
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 on human errors that are based on due to lack of concentration and carelessness.
This
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 reasons all year maximum citizens die
for
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 road accidents and some are disabled as well as their valuable vehicles.If the government take
this
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this
 will give more
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 in
future
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the future
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 generation. In conclusion, it must be said that
driverless
transportasion
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transportation
 has clear
advantage
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advantages
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outwaye
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outway
outward
 disadvantages.My
parsonal
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personal
 view
that
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driverless
 cars will get more beneficial
inpact
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impact
 for
socitey
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society
.
finally
, I believe
driverless
 cars will
impact
 positively
in
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 the future generation.

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