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Some people think that excessive use of smart phones badly affects teenager’s literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #phones #teenager’s #literacy #skills
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use
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 of cellular
devices
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 may have several negative
impacts
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 on young
people
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. It is argued that it may
harm
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 the academic
abilities
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 of
youth
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. I do not agree with
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opinion
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 and believe that it is harmful for the young
generation
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 in some
aspects
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;
however
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, overall in
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era
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 it is
one
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 of the
essentials
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 that
youth
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 must have with them. Excessive
use
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 of cellular
devices
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 may have several negative
impacts
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 on young
people
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. It is argued that it may
harm
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 the academic
abilities
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 of
youth
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. I do not agree with
this
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opinion
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 and believe that it is harmful for
young
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the young
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generation
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 in some
aspects
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;
however
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, overall in
this
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 digital
age
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 it is
one
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 of the
essentials
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 that
youth
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 must have with them. Excessive
use
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 of cellular
devices
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 may have several negative
impacts
Use synonyms
 on young
people
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. It is argued that it may
harm
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 the academic
abilities
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 of
youth
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. I do not agree with
this
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opinion
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 and believe that it is harmful for
young
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the young
show examples
generation
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 in some
aspects
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;
however
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, overall in
this
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 digital
age
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,age
show examples
 it is
one
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 of the
essentials
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 that
youth
Use synonyms
 must have with them. Excessive
use
Use synonyms
 of cellular
devices
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 may have several negative
impacts
Use synonyms
 on young
people
Use synonyms
. It is argued that it may
harm
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 the academic
abilities
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 of
youth
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. I do not agree with
this
Linking Words
opinion
Use synonyms
 and believe that it is harmful for
young
Add an article
the young
show examples
generation
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 in some
aspects
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;
however
Linking Words
, overall in
this
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 digital
age
Add a comma
,age
show examples
 it is
one
Use synonyms
 of the
essentials
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 that
youth
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 must have with them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pervasive
  • diminished
  • sustained
  • complex vocabulary
  • sentence structures
  • shorthand communication
  • adhere
  • standard rules
  • punctuation
  • educational apps
  • real-time communication
  • comprehension levels
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