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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language, because some students don’t have a natural ability for languages. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The education system should not force our
children
 to learn a new foreign
language
 because not all of them are mentally prepared to learn it. To that extent, I am partly in agreement due to the following reasons that I will explain in
this
 essay. Globalisation is present in our daily life, proof of
that is
 that travel abroad our country
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is currently easier than in the
last
 century and on that basis, we are aware that foreign languages play an important role in our lives. In fact, recent research made by the University of Toronto, give us information about the student's preferences when they chose their foreign
language
. Many of them, more specifically 80% preferred to study English as a foreign
language
, and 20% of them were German
language
 lovers. For that reason, I am totally convinced that
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 we should start to learn a new foreign
language
 when we are
children
,in order to be prepared for the future. Notwithstanding, there is
also
 a lot of teachers who claim that forcing our
children
 to do an activity like
this
, which requires special abilities, has a negative impact on them, and could lead to feelings like frustration, sadness or depression. Many American psychologists
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 argue that current families are forcing their
children
 to do these things only because they did not have
this
 possibility in the past. To conclude, I believe that each case should be analysed because not all
children
 have the same ability to learn foreign languages. As a society, it is our obligation to encourage those who show
this
 special talent in order to make easier their career and at the same time should be aware that
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society needs not only foreign-
language
 speakers but
also
 needs scientists, mathematicians, singers...
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