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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that the
salaries
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 of citizens in a
country
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 should approximately be the same rather than having a difference between their
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 .
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, certain individuals support the view that
people
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 with high
salaries
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 are assets to a nation. In my opinion, the latter is true.
People
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 who support the idea that the salary of everyone in a state should be the same might think that because it has seen the poor become poorer due to lack of income resources and the rich become richer by investing money.
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, it is the responsibility of the state to control
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 scenario and should create equal opportunities for everyone, because everyone deserves a chance to live better lives.
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, in developing countries like
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 , it can be seen that due to inflation and lack of employment, most of the population belong to the middle class and lower middle class , whereas, a few upper-class families earn millions by investing in new businesses.
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, the population demanded from the government control
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 situation.
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, a group of
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 argue that a crowd with handsome
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 are good for a
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 because ultimately they are contributing to the nation's economy by paying taxes. And
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 good amount of tax is
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 used by the centre for the welfare of its common citizens.
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, these
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 are earning more than other
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 is due to their extraordinary talents and hard work .
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, the government should not limit their boundaries and try to cease their creativity.
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,
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 elite group sometimes
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 create jobs opportunities for the rest of the population by creating new businesses.To illustrate, there is a family in
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 called 'Ambani', who is a billionaire and comes on the list of ten richest families in the world.
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 family has created a number of businesses in
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, resulting in creating millions of jobs for other citizens , and
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 family is an asset to
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. In conclusion,
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 it is the government's responsibility to eliminate the financial difference between the
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 of its
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, smart and intelligent
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 who are earning handsome
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 due to their efforts are actually good for a
country
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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