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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In our world, there are various types of regulations that are concerned to make the highest efficiency in each society. Depending on the law, owning a residence is impossible which make most citizens move to any place.
On the other hand
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, possessing a
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, the government has a huge problem dealing with land management.
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, every coin has two sides, in my opinion, I think
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 statement has a more negative situation, reason and argument will be included in
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Firstly
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, a residence is one of four requisites
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 crucial for the masses. Some of them may think that
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 possessing make them feel good.
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, it shows the status in society, the crowd will respect the one who has their own
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. From the perspective of
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 who lived in
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 community, we need to spend a lot of money, which constitutes 50% of income on
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home loans.
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, to have comfortableness, citizens need to dedicate an enormous part of their income to habitation.
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, from my observation and experience, the government have terrible problems with owning
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 culture. Because wealthy
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 will take benefit from
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 circumstance by speculating, controlling demand is impractical.
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, many public systems have enormous problems,
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, some construction effect the irrigation system which blocks the waterway, as a consequence, floods
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 occurred.
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, authorities cannot command these
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 to demolish or move their habitation.
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, there are many negative incidents of possessing the land. In conclusion, to have a
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 make satisfy of mind,
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, except the individual advantages, government get extremely difficulty with city plan management.
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, I disagree that the present
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 is not vital for humans. Renting is not a bad choice for living, overall public interest need to be more considerate. In prediction, as land is a limited resource and the cost of
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living trend to have an increment.
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,
people
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 seem to rent more in future because they can not afford it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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