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Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on different factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Happiness in human beings is a part of
life
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. Some believe it comes after getting economic success, but others say that it can be achieved in different ways. In my opinion, I believe economic success as well as other criteria in a person's
life
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 brings happiness. On one hand, being rich makes anyone do anything in
life
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.
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, richness brings joy by fulfilling every dream of
life
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, whether it is buying luxury homes, land, and cars or
traveling
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travelling
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 the world.
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, a family with a strong economy has happier
life
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 because their children do not have to suffer from anything in
life
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.
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, many Americans spend more than 80
percent
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per cent
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 of their daily
life
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 on entertainment, while Africans spend their day looking for good food.
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 is happening, due to the economic success achieved by the USA, so they worry less about other basic things.
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, there are many people out there, who are unhappy with their
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 even after being rich and successful. To clarify, not all person enjoys joy with
money
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. Some want love from their parents, and some desire to be accompanied by besties,
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, to them,
money
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 can only buy physical things.
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, in South Korea, a survey conducted in 2009 revealed that many kids from rich families usually have fewer friends during their school days than those from poor or middle families. It is because rich parents teach their children to stay away from poor friends.
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, children tend to enjoy themselves a lot even when they are unaware of the richness of each other. In conclusion, economic stability is important in
life
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 to attain desires which could not be possible, if there is no
money
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. In the meantime, people have to build relationships other than
money
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-oriented business relationships to obtain happiness in
life
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 that can be fulfilled by
money
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.

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