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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
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 age of technology, humanity has always been driven to explore endless
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. Some people argue that spending financial
resources
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 for
space
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 research and development programs would be a waste
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 others believe that these
resources
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 should be utilized to address earth problems. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss both views and provide my opinion.
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 with, dedicating a proper proportion of the government's annual budget to
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 research is beneficial for earth habitants. To illustrate, sooner or later, our
resources
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 are going to be thoroughly disappear.
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 a NASA article, oil reservoirs which are considered primarily as the source of energy, will be completely drained by the end of 2060.
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, finding other potential planets for energy
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 or human migration would be vital.
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, spending too much money on
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 exploration might cause ignorance of the current issues about planet Earth. To expand, metropolitans have heavy traffic issues which result in air pollution, or failure to manage water
resources
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 which results in drought crises and tensions between countries.
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, the Middle Eastern countries are already struggling with the water shortage.
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, considering the problems our planet is engaging with, would be crucial too. In conclusion, it is undeniable that governments should dedicate financial
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 to
space
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 research and exploration programs to ensure humanity's survival in the long term.
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, indulgence uses of these
resources
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 can definitely cause catastrophic impacts on our lives, unless and until our monetary policies regarding mentioned programs are well-controlled.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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