Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing, causing them many health problems, including obesity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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The growth of health problems associated with
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behaviour disorders continues all over the world. It is estimated by prominent medical scientists that
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of
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suffering from excessive weight will acquire more than 30% by 2050 in developed countries. I would like to observe some reasons
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issue and probable ways to resolve
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growth world economy and more quick pace of life enhance
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to perform all their
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faster including having a meal. The majority of contemporary
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in perpetual harry, and they have to be on
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, to keep up
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the speed of life in order to rich better results, to earn more money. In the situation of
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deficiency
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an average person cannot afford to spend much
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on cooking,
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he
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to eat more junk
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. We
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bring up our children in scarcity of
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and they, unfortunately, learn our bad habits. Due to
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we have
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sharp growth of obesity
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the youth. In regards
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probable measures in order to find the solution, I would like to say, that the government should pay more attention to the problem of obesity
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young ageing groups. I would like to mention
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absence of measures in the area of school
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. I mean that in my country fairly attention is not
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to
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of school
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. And because of
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, dishes at schools are not delicious enough to attract students, but it is cheap for education executives.
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young
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more
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tend to fast
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instead
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of eating healthy dishes. In conclusion,
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the issue of incorrect
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behaviour is really important, especially for the youth, some measures, concerning school
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supply, could be undertaken in order to improve the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • processed food
  • fast food
  • nutritional education
  • calorie-dense
  • nutrient-poor
  • convenience
  • busy lifestyles
  • food deserts
  • marketing and advertising
  • food choices
  • cultural norms
  • food preparation
  • obesity
  • eating habits
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