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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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These days the young generation moving from the countryside for significant reasons
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 studying or working. It has benefits and drawbacks that affect mostly
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the
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all parts of society.
This
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areas
 to urban cities. One side of the coin is that village
people
 are leaving their homes for important reasons
as
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first
-ranked education of higher job opportunities in crowded
areas
. According to research data, approximately one hundred thousand
kazakh
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people
 moved away from rural
areas
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 of
the
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Kazakhstan. In that way, village
people
 can have more opportunities to
taught
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 their children in top-rated schools and find
a high-paid job vacancies
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. After all, it will increase more
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 in
vatious
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various
 fields which leads to economic benefits in near future. On the other side,
it
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comes
to
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drawbacks
as
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damages
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in
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 agriculture and much more crowded urban territories. The high amount of
people
 in cities
are come
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 to issues that
negtively
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negatively
 affect to local society lifestyle.
For instance
, in the capital of
kazakhstan
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 lives one million
people
, which most of
them
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 are
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not
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nit
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 local citizens.
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, there
is
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 a lot of traffic jams and overcrowded places. In fact, it
is
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also
 affect
to
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rural
areas
, because of
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a small
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 amount of
people
 who can work
on
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 agriculture. In the end, it is negatively
affect
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 to
economical
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the economical
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 situation in the country. In conclusion, many young parts of
population
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the population
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 are leaving
countryside
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the countryside
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 to have more opportunities to study or work. In
this
 situation, it has more drawbacks
that
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than
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 totally outweigh its advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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