In the 20th century, contact between many different parts of the world has developed rapidly through air travel and telecommunications. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Through air travel and telecommunications, the relationship between many

countries

are grew

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fast in

20th

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the 20th

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century.

Although

this

will weaken the national culture and traditions, I believe that the advantages will outweigh the drawbacks because it will help industries expands their

trade

and

increase

world economic growth. People are travel more using

airplane

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and

this

may harm the tradition and culture which already exist in that country. Youngers tend to adapt fast

with

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new

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trend

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and think that the traditional cultures are ancient.

For example

, Indonesia has hundreds of local languages and

culture

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cultures

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,

such

as

Saman

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the Saman

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dance

from Aceh Province.

On the other hand

,

K-Pop

industries which are popular around the world impact

on

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the loss of that traditional

dance

. Most of youngers population in Indonesia love

that

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K-Pop

song

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songs

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,

K-Pop

dance

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dances

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and they travel a lot to Korea to watch the

K-Pop

concert and they do not have interested to learn the traditional

dance

.

However

, I believe that the connection between

countries

will

increase

the growth of international

trade

and improve national GDP across the nations. The

advantages

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from

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contact between

countries

is

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that

this

will

increase

the

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apply

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international

trade

and

this

will impact

to

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the import and export

local

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of local

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product across the nations.

This

international

trade

will

increase

national

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the national

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GDP because the value of the goods will raise due to the commodity export.

For example

, many local products

such

as rattan furniture in Bali has been exported to America and Europe and the price

are

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much higher rather than

sold

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those sold

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locally. In conclusion,

although

it might

be affect

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the traditional cultures, the growth of contact between many

countries

will

increase

international

trade

and will raise national GDP. For these reasons, the advantages far outnumber the drawbacks.