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To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some of the countries in Africa eat
insects
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 as food or snacks or edibles actually some believe
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part of a healthy diet. It has been a
controversal
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controversial
 argument amongst the country's citizens . Most African governments where infect not able to come to a conclusion if they should approve it as part of a healthy diet or just eat it as food. So whoever eats them
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on
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 prerogative.At the same time under the same blanket
Insects
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 are good for our environmental cleansing in as much as they might taste good to others, they need to be considerate of our
nature
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. They need to be preserved. A good
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 example is my home
counrty
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country
county
 Zimbabwe, we have
people
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 who eat the Mopani worms, infect
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a certain tribe called the Ndebele
people
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, those are the
people
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 that introduced it to the rest of the other tribes, I have tried and tested the Mopani worms, they are so delicious I
woudn't
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wouldn't
 mind having them as an edible but because of the love
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 have for
nature
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 to the point that
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 feel like
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 very unfair for us
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humans to eat
insects
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 would
advice
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 the
people
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 not to eat them and sort for other edibles. 1992 was a challenging year for my nation,
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 we experienced a severe drought and because of drought there was famine, it was so terrible,
people
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 had to sort food from
nature
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 and
insects
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 were the only meat available, our
people
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 started eating
insects
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 and it had a very negative impact on
nature
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 to the point that in 1993 when it rained, the
people
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 could not harvest their produce well because there
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 no
insects
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 to help with the recycling of
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, that was terrible.
Insects
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plays
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 a big role in
nature
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, the equation of
nature
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 is not complete if there are no
insects
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. In
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 I want to encourage everyone to look after
nature
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 by not eating
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 even if there is a famine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • edible insects
  • increasing population
  • food needs
  • unhealthy
  • negatively affect
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • nutritional value
  • sustainable
  • efficient
  • abundant
  • accessible
  • economic benefits
  • culinary diversity
  • social acceptance
  • cultural acceptance
  • allergies
  • health concerns
  • environmental impact
  • ethical considerations
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