The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In modern society,
cars
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are essential parts of our daily life. Many households have their own
cars
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for different purposes.
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,
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a useful machine causes a few problems
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the world. In
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way, I recommend that we should take other options rather than
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. In the following, I will present my view.
Firstly
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,
cars
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are one of the sources of air pollution. Every
car
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has an engine. When
this
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power unit is operating, it produces
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gases, which will enhance the
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effect of the earth. In
this
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way, unlimited use of
cars
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may cause a large
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of
greenhouse
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gases,
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detrimental to our environment.
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, a lot of
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died or inure due to
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accidents. Though modern
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install
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equipment
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to ensure the safety of
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drivers and passengers, many
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accidents rise from human errors.
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,
people
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drink a lot of alcohol before driving. If we allow more
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using
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cars
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,
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the
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then
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it is unavoidable that more accidents will occur.
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, I suggest
people
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use more alternative transportations rather than
cars
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.
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,
people
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should travel by subway more. Comparatively, the subway does not cause any
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gases.
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, the accident rate
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subway
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is much less than
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.
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, it causes
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problems
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us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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