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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

#countries #crime #novels #tv #dramas #books #fiction
Over years it becomes widespread in the world to make
people
 aware of
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diverse criminal stories and
TV
 shows. The basic purpose
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this
 trend is
engaging
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 more consumers. From
the
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 point
of
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my
view
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 it could have
inaccurate
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 impact on teenagers’
behavior
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. Mainly the criminal
TV
 creations and novels gain ground, in
order
 to gather more followers. Undoubtedly, the goal of different
TV
programs
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an other
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 entertainment
programs
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 is to have as many observers as possible
that is
 why the editors and the creational group of that
programs
 put all their
effords
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efforts
affords
 in
order
 to
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 wonder
people
’s desire.
Thus
, they collect all
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 of criminal literature as a film or
novel
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novels
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, in
order
 to make it the most demanding and interesting program for
people
, which would raise the reputation of the
TV
 channels or journals. One of our Armenian
TV
 channels called ‘’Armenia
TV
’’,
for instance
, has
allocate
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 1 hour to the most famous criminal reporter of Armenia, who presents entire car crashes and murders in Armenia for a week, after which the followers of that channel
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been risen
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 about 20%. To be honest,
to be
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 aware of detailed crime cases could have
wrong
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 impact on immature
people
. In essence, there exists some
type
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 of
people
 who are not smart cookies and they would like to take any type of measure in
order
 to become popular and familiar in a short time.
That is
 why the fiction of criminal stories will be the ideal option for becoming popular, as they can repeat just a prompt of theft or group beating, two
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 but two, which will lead to becoming public person, regardless
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 merits of character. It was the case with my friend,
for instance
, who organized
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 of the local
jewelry
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 shop, in
order
 to have
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on
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his lovely girl, thinking that he acted bravely. Ro
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,
recent
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 years crime articles and
TV
 crime
programs
 become common. The main reason behind
this
 development is the purpose of
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 number of followers, which, unfortunately, can impact
teenagers
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 upbringing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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